Hello again friends! Below is a story for this week’s Scifi Promptcast episode(video below)! Be sure to let me know anything you think about my story especially its faults! How else can I grow as a writer if I don’t get helpful criticism?
“Beth. Breathe. Okay? Look into my eyes- that’s it breathe. Just breathe.”
The dizziness receded as Beth slowed down. Slower, and slower, until Garret let her go and turned towards the undulating white mass on the ground.
“Wha- What the hell is that thing?”
“I don’t know. But I don’t think it’s going to hurt us.”
“L- let’s just get out of here Garret.”
“Just, wait I wanna…” He picked up a stick, “See something.”
He moved towards the mass of white and pink with slow cautious steps. When he was close enough, he pushed the tip of the stick underneath it and pulled. What he saw was a reddish pink lined with sulfuric spokes, and something blue deep under there just out of reach. It twitched, and he jumped.
He backed away and turned back to Beth.
“Can we go now?”
He grabbed her by the arm and pulled her from the thing.
“I don’t really think it’s a danger but it scares the crap outta me.” He said, “So sit in the truck. There’s something under it that I need to get a second look at.”
“You can’t just leave me in here!”
“Relax, here’s the key, lock the door and drive off if anyone but me comes back.”
He walked off back towards the mass of white, but when he arrived it was missing. He was sure he had retraced his steps into the brush just the same, and there were no tracks out from where he left it.
Then there was a sound, and Garret looked up to the bright blue hidden in the pink.
Beth woke in the F-150 to Garret thumping a lazy fist against the window. The whites of his eyes had turned a pale yellow, and his smile contorted his lips into open flesh.
He thumped his lazy fist on the window one more time, and then opened his mouth- held it there- and closed it back up again. Beth unlocked the door and he hopped in. When he was seated he turned and looked at her. His yellow eyes and flesh grin made her shudder. He pointed to the windshield, opened his mouth, and screeched so loud that she slammed her hands into her ears.
She rammed her shoulder into the door as she pulled its handle. She fell out of the truck hard onto her back, and as she fumbled to get up Garret’s hand pulled his head over the seat. She saw him clearer now, a pale white over pink, and where brown eyes caught her trance, something blue sat on sulfuric bulbs and watched her struggle for her life.
Now that you’ve done the prompt yourself, feel free to edit it and send post a link to it in the comments for critiquing! I will gladly read aloud the stories that are linked below in the Friday videos and do a quick critique of your work. Hope you found the creatures fun! Keep writing, my friends!